Monday, 2 July 2012

Blogging Now!!!





This is my first blog, but its sole purpose is for ppl to read and judge my sad attemp at a novel.
the story is called The Land Of Gallahan for the moment. and is set in a medieval world of my creation and follows the adventures of Azrael Galla. i hope you enjoy it, i will update hopefully a couple of chapters a month if i can. any one who reads it and has an opinion on my work feel free to comment.


The Prologue is rather long i know but please bare with me :D


i would ask that you make your comments constructive as just shooting me down is not what im looking for here.


:D
Shaun





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6 comments:

  1. Anonymous3 July 2012 at 10:58

    this is a great we start of a story. look forward to reading more

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  2. Anonymous3 July 2012 at 14:30

    Good read so far, looking forward to reading more, deep seeded revenge from an early age, coined with unadulterated rage and magic the would make Gandalph look like Harry Potters spanish house-maid, Shimla,...kickin ass ,..not taking names.

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    1. Anonymous4 July 2012 at 13:19

      lmao i wont bother commenting lol this says it all lol.
      looking forward to more lol

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  3. Barabu3 July 2012 at 16:23

    Okay, Where to begin...

    First off, some of the names seem too similar to those of other well known stories.

    The language used seems a little immature at times, the use of the word 'victim' where i feel 'sacrifice' would have been a better fit, to name but one.

    Author mentioned Prologue was a bit long, I feel thats untrue. I feel it is noyt long enough, I wish to know a little more about where the antagonist gathered this army from, maybe a little bit more about those opposing him and why the invasion was started. surely at some point the overly confident loose tongues antagonist would have let on some of his reason for doing what he has.

    I think more depth has to be added to the prologue to give the reader more of an insight into what this is about, as at this point its basically some homicidal power hungry being burning and killing men who we know nothing about other than their names.

    I would assume that in the story at some point this Antagonist is going to work his way free from wherever he was banished to, and that a hero will emerge, I just would like for the reader to gain a bit more feeling in the prologue rather than feel he is being told the whole of a story in a few short paragraphs with one of the reasoning behind that story itterated.


    I do not mean to sound like I do not like this, as that is far from true, I am now curious as to what happens, but i was asked for my 2 cents and thats what i gave, I hope it is constued as constructive critisism rather than just a 'bashing'

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    1. Anonymous4 July 2012 at 03:26

      i disagree, i think this prolouge has done exactly as it was supposed to as we are now curious and want to read more. the author told me the names were not definate at the moment and could be changed later. i think for it being the prolouge and having hooked us all its impressive. but again thats just my 2 cents and of course every one is welcome to their opinion. :D

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  4. Anonymous4 July 2012 at 13:14

    Very good read mate. It made me want to read more and more! Keep it up mate - an inspiration to us all!

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